Czy to jest dobrze? Czy ewentualnie mogę prosić o korektę, jakąś pomoc ? Bo wiem, że muszę coś poprawić w tym ale nie wiem jak..

My Ghost Story. My story began when a man usptairs in my apartment building that I did not know committed suicide. I know about this because the apartment landlord told me about it. Shortly thereafter I was sitting in my basement apartment living room and watching Tv. When the strong smell of men's cologne flooded the room and cold chill went through my legs right down to the bone. It was a deep and strange cold and it was summertime. I could sense that I was no longer alone. I jumped up and checked to see if the window was open or if there was anything in the room. That could have created that smell, but all of the windows were closed and I smelled everything and nothing smelled like the strong odor that I was smelling. Then some strange things began to happen in my apartment like bangs on the walls, things moving on their own, things vanishing and then reappearing, being touched at night, strange putrid smells, and I also saw an orb float by right in front of me and go into the wall. I asked the londlord about the man upstairs that had killed himself and he told me that the man did in fact wear a waiter in a local restaurant. But in time as the activity incresed I began to realize that I may not just dealing with a ghost, but also a demon. Everything that went on seemed to be to try to generate fear and make me feel powerless and helpless in my own home... God helped me to drive this nasty sprit out. I could sense and feel angles in my home and after the evil spirit was finally taken away.
Nauczycielka mówiła, że zdania są za długie i zbyt skomplikowane. Należało by je jakoś ułatwić i skrócić, jeśli mogę liczyć na jakieś wskazówki, poprawe lub pomoc będę bardzo wdzięczna. Z góry dziękuje :).